16 Comments on “Treasure Trove of the Dearly Departed – Flash Fiction Piece”
Hmm.. I think my previous comment of prostrate adoration has vanished into thin air… I didn’t get a message of awaiting approval so I’ll give it another try. (Sorry if it does turn out to be a double post.)
I love this story. I like your protagonist’s voice, he is funny, especially his musings on impending middle-age made me laugh. (which of course says absolutely NOTHING about how I feel on my own impending doom… ehm)
I thought the way you weaved pertinent details in from the previous story was expertly done, very smooth and not intruding in the story like it can be in sequels.
So, Mr. Spaceman, you do it again. Great sequel! I love your protagonist’s voice, especially his musings on his upcoming middle-age. More, please.
Oh, and I think you did a great job of weaving in pertinent details from the prequel.
Nice work! I didn’t get a chance to read last week’s, so I came in a little blind, but had no problem picking it up. Interesting how you chose to really highlight three of the four items as major plot devices while leaving the fourth as kind of a descriptive one-off.
Thankyah! Glad you managed to pick up the plot despite not having read last week’s instalment. I did have some small concerns that the story might be inaccessible to new readers, but you’ve put my fears to rest. Many thanks.
Good work, US. Very well written piece. The pacing and flow was natural, and the setting clarified enough that I could picture the action clearly. Enjoyable read.
~Christopher
This was great! I’m so glad you continued with last week’s piece and I can’t wait to see what comes next. Even though I’m humming the Little Mermaid song in my head…did I say that out loud?
Wonderful! An excellent addition to last weeks challenge. You worked the items in a great way. I hope you do get a chance next week to give us some more questions to muse over. Two thumbs up, Spaceman!
I think I like this part almost better than the first one. A really great follow up making me wonder more and more about the motivations of the aliens. If they are in fact aliens after all.
Observations of The Urban Spaceman 
Glorken
The Urban Spaceman
Observations of The Urban Spaceman 
Hmm.. I think my previous comment of prostrate adoration has vanished into thin air… I didn’t get a message of awaiting approval so I’ll give it another try. (Sorry if it does turn out to be a double post.)
I love this story. I like your protagonist’s voice, he is funny, especially his musings on impending middle-age made me laugh. (which of course says absolutely NOTHING about how I feel on my own impending doom… ehm)
I thought the way you weaved pertinent details in from the previous story was expertly done, very smooth and not intruding in the story like it can be in sequels.
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Sorry, of course now it turns up in my browser. Feel free to delete.
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So, Mr. Spaceman, you do it again. Great sequel! I love your protagonist’s voice, especially his musings on his upcoming middle-age. More, please.
Oh, and I think you did a great job of weaving in pertinent details from the prequel.
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Nice work! I didn’t get a chance to read last week’s, so I came in a little blind, but had no problem picking it up. Interesting how you chose to really highlight three of the four items as major plot devices while leaving the fourth as kind of a descriptive one-off.
Still, quite enjoyable.
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Thankyah! Glad you managed to pick up the plot despite not having read last week’s instalment. I did have some small concerns that the story might be inaccessible to new readers, but you’ve put my fears to rest. Many thanks.
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Good work, US. Very well written piece. The pacing and flow was natural, and the setting clarified enough that I could picture the action clearly. Enjoyable read.
~Christopher
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Thanks for the feedback, I enjoy hearing about what works for a reader so I can continue to do those things. Cheers!
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This was great! I’m so glad you continued with last week’s piece and I can’t wait to see what comes next. Even though I’m humming the Little Mermaid song in my head…did I say that out loud?
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Thanks! And re: Little Mermaid… I won’t tell if you don’t 😉
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I appreciate your discretion!
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Oh, I love this story. I do hope you keep going. So many questions I have!
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Many thanks for the kind words and encouragement 🙂
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Wonderful! An excellent addition to last weeks challenge. You worked the items in a great way. I hope you do get a chance next week to give us some more questions to muse over. Two thumbs up, Spaceman!
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Cheers! 🙂 Hope I get to finish it too, as I’m having a lot of fun writing it.
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I think I like this part almost better than the first one. A really great follow up making me wonder more and more about the motivations of the aliens. If they are in fact aliens after all.
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Thanks Fatma, glad you approve. Maybe next week I’ll even get to finish it off. 🙂
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